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Modern Shopping centre are more convenient, however, small local super markets still are have many customers. Discuss advantages and disadvantages? Which one is better

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Everyday Modern shopping
centres
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 are opening in
suburb
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suburbs
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 and big cities. These shopping
centres
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 are convenient
as a result
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 small local
markets
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 are losing customers. I will explain
this
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 below. On the
first
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 hand, these modern shopping
centres
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 are opened in every suburb. So,
it’s
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 easy to get there. They have almost every type of
product
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shops
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shop
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.
Hence
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, one doesn’t have to go to different
shops
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 to buy different
products
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. It saves petrol and money. If the
product
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 is faulty
it’s
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 easy to replace and get another.
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, Customer service and Cleanliness is of
high
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 standard. These shopping
centre
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centres
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 have video surveillance and security,
therefore
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,
it’s
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 safe to shop.
Moreover
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, Modern shopping
centres
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 consist of famous brand
shops
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.
On the other hand
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, Small local
markets
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 are smaller. It is often to get overcharged by the staff. Customer service and Cleanliness is of
low
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 standard.
Products
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 are of poor quality. Sometimes,
it’s
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 hard to find a particular
product
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.
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,
Products
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 are not labelled properly and placed
untidy
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 on the shelves. So,
its
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it
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 takes time to find a particular
product
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Although
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, Modern shopping
centres
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 are crowded with
people
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. But, I think it makes
people
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 happy when they see so many
people
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 shopping. Many advertising
are
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is
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 successful in
the
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apply
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modern shopping
centres
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.
This
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 helps
people
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 in knowing about the
product
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 and
their
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its
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 uses.
At
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 the end, it is clear that modern shopping
centres
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 have many advantages over small local
markets
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. That’s the reason small local
markets
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 are losing their popularity. .
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, I believe that only
shops
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 selling particular country’s
products
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 that are not available
to
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apply
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in modern shopping
centres
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 are still popular
between
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among
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 those country
people
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.

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