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Some people think happiness/emotional health is a way to have a good life. Others feel that Physicalhealth is a better way of having good live... Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #happiness #health #life #physicalhealth
There is a pervasive notion these days that it is crucial to be healthy in order to be fully happy with
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 life. While there is an opinion that
phisical
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physical
health
 importance prevails over the mental state, others claim that mental well-being is vital. In
this
 essay, I will examine both views and give my opinion that both aspects are relevant for being completely
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sat satisfied
 with your
health
. From my personal perspective, being
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physically
 strong and active during
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the
that
 life is paramount because of the benefits it yields. A lot of studies revealed that being active every day people can increase their longevity since sport
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exercises
substentially
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substantially
 decrease the rate of
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premature death, which are usually caused either by various chronic diseases or a sedentary lifestyle.
That is
 why
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 I think that sport enhances our chances for a future
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fulfilment
.
However
, I believe that
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 well-being plays a determining role in people’s lives too. It is well-known fact that while a person sits
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quietly
 in meditation or contemplation, using his mental faculties as little as possible, it strengthens his memory and allows
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 refresh his mind. In turn, these particular factors
then
 result in better intellectual abilities and expand an attention span, which
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 completely vital in the modern world. In conclusion, even though many people opt for
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 of people’s
health
, I believe that they can achieve a perfect state of
health
 only by incorporating
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 activities and techniques for mental stability;
thus
, they become able to
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improve
 their general
quility
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quality
 of life.
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