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Movies and computer games containing violence are popular. Some people say they have a negative effect on society and should be censored. Others say they are just harmless relaxation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The latest technological advancements provide
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 with various entertainment resources. While there is an opinion that video games and films with violence could provoke many dire consequences and
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 should be banned, others disagree and think that it is just a way to unwind. In the essay, I will examine both views and explain why I consider that the content is dangerous not only for adults but
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 for
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 and foremost, mental stability is crucial nowadays. Indeed, when
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 are exposed to different stressors, it affects a lot on their mood.
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, while a person unconsciously absorbs negative information throughout screens, he is prone to constant feelings of depression and apprehension, and
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, in turn, may even lead to suicide.
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,
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 a situation happens even if
people
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 do not perceive violence as something bad. The other point
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 worth to be mentioned is the exposure of the young generation. Indeed,
children
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 are more sensitive to information that they see during playing or watching video games.
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, when they are exposed to brutal scenes with murders,
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, a child might get used to violent actions and eventually consider abnormal behaviour as normal;
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, in the future, he could become a criminal or even a murder.
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 why I think that we should prohibit
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 to play games that contain scary scenes. In conclusion, many
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 underestimate the influence of pictures that can be seen on screens. Regardless of whether
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 think that it is a relaxing activity, I think that there is a severe impact on adults because they become more depressed and on
children
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 since they change their attitude to the world.

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