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You stayed at a hotel recently and forgot your clothes there. Write a letter to the hotel manager and say – When and where did you stay? – Describe your clothes. – What would you like the manager to do about it? Answer

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter in order to inform you that I left my clothes at your hotel, The Golden INN.
Firstly
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,my name is Shreya and I stayed at your hotel from 1st to 3rd September. My client-id is ED56 and the room number was 1134.
However
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, I left some precious things in your hotel room. It is a dark brown gown from the well-known brand Gucci.
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 that, there is a pair of blue jeans that I left behind ,and I assume both
the
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clothes are inside the almirah of the room that I was using. Those clothes are precious to me as they
had been
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 gifted to me by my husband on our first wedding anniversary.
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, I would really want to get them back. I would like to
request
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 you if you could please send my dress and jeans back to the address mentioned as the sender's address on the envelope.
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,the courier cost that you will incur, I will reimburse the same. Kindly, provide me with the bank account details where I should transfer the money. I would be obliged if you help me here by sending my product back. If you need any other
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 details, please call me back on the number given on the envelope. I look forward to hearing from you. Thanking you. Yours faithfully, Shreya
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task response
Clearly state the address where the clothes need to be sent, as well as the information required for the bank transfer.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph is logically connected and flows smoothly from one to the next. Consider restructuring the letter for improved coherence.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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