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Although sound moral judgment is an important characteristic of an effective leader, it is not as important as a leader’s ability to maintain the respect of his or her peers.

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Introduction
Moral sound judgement is a very important and necessary
characteristics
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 for a
leader
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 to be effective in their role but respecting
peers
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 is
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 important and required to maintain effective leadership . It's not a hardcore
decision
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 to be only a moral sound
decision
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-maker without respecting
peers
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 and there are certain reasons associated with it.
Body paragraph 1
Decision
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 making is always the most important work for a
leader
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 as the
decision
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 can decide the consequences on its followers and
peers
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 . In small to large organisations,leaders make
decisions
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 based on the inputs from their
peers
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 and from few people whom they consider the authentic and reliable resources of information .
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: A
decision
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 from Hitler changed the future of Germany and the people of Germany suffered a lot during war times but a
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 from Mahatma Gandhi to abstain from violence and chose the path of peace and non-violence and helped India to get Freedom .
Body paragraph 2
Even. though a
leader
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 becomes effective when takes
decisions
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 incisively
but
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associate respect should be kept in mind
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 .It's very common that few
peers
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 may disagree with the
decision
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from
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of
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 a
leader
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 but the
leader
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 should take their opinion and discuss
with
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it with
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 them. It's important
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 because for a
leader
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 to be effective it's necessary that
peers
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 pad him while the
leader
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 makes some tough
decisions
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 .
Conclusion
It is certainly true that sometimes respecting the
peers
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instead
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 of taking necessary
decisions
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 resulted in chaos and negative outputs but still respecting
peers
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 is important but not so important that it supplants the positives of a sound moral
decision
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 .

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