Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared to living in an apartment?

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Some individuals like to stay at
home
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, whereas others think that it is good to live in sharing
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accommodation.
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, it is more convenient to stay at their
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own residence;
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, an apartment
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provides many benefits. I believe that
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living
in
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home
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a home
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has more pros than cons. To commence with, free from
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mental
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stress, if
people
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stay at their
home
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,it reduces their
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expenditure because they do not need to pay rent every
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and they can save a lot of money, which can be utilized in giving better qualifications to children.
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, they can
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enjoy the company of
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family, which is not possible in an apartment. It
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is not only declining
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their mental stress
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but
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make them free from burdens. To justify it, a recent study has been shown that,
people
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who live at their
home
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instead
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of sharing are
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healthier and happier than their counterparts.
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, living in apartments
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face
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problem
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problems
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of adjustment. In the sharing When a
people
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from different
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and with different thoughts, it leads to maladjustment and
lose
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their mental peace. It enforces them to change accommodations frequently, which is
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a wastage
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of time.
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, it is the wastage of money, owing to, they pay every month to their owner and
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does not worth.
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can utilize
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money to make their own
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home
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. So that,
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can spend their pending life comfortably. To conclude,
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, sharing accommodation helps to handle difficult situations, I believe that, living in
house
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has more benefits as compared to its drawbacks
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as it decreases financial burden and responsibilities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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