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In some countries, more and more people becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are reasons for this? How can people research this?

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In the past, the
history
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 facts of any particular
house
 were only being interested
by
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 architects and estate agents.
However
, in
the
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modern time, more and more
people
 are passionate about researching their residence’s
background
 to satisfy their curiosity or for their religious purposes.
This
 essay will discuss some main causes for
this
 trend and suggest a few possible methods for finding the
history
 of any
house
. Curiosity is probably the
first
 reason that urging
people
 to investigate the
background
 of their building.
That is
 due to the fact that many
people
 start sharing their own stories lying under their
house
 on social media,
thus
 encourage more
people
, especially youngsters, to find interesting facts of their place so that have
more
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 decent conversation with their friends. Another factor that can be accounted for is the owners' superstitious matters.
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 for Asian countries - where the
local
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locals
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 are well-known for their
religion
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 culture, the past events of their
house
 become far more important since they show whether that building is suitable for the owners or not.
For instance
, Vietnamese have a traditional rule stating that they should not live on, or near, a former graveyard because
that is
 disrespectful to the deaths and they will be punished for that.
Therefore
, it is necessary for
people
 to know the past details of their property. There are plenty
methods
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 that can be applied for finding a
house
's
background
.
Firstly
, despite the fact that many real estate agents may sometimes
distorted
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 the truth in order to have an easier negotiation with buyers, they are still a very reliable source for ones who want to know better about their
house
. These agents always have specific details about their in-charged building,
thus
 if any
people
 can get access to it, they will be fully equipped with
necessary
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 information.
Secondly
, social media can
also
 be used to research
about
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one location.
However
,
this
 method might not
as
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 effective compared to the previous one because it is extremely difficult to find any information
of
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 a specific area. In essence, it is irrefutable that the interest
on
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 the
history
 of their
house
 will still increase in the future. Particularly, most
of
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people
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the people
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 want to know better about the
history
 of their
house
 because of their curiosity and their superstitious and through online articles and
people
's knowledge, they can gather the basic
background
 of their residence.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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