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More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will be the consequences of this? What solution can you offer?

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There is an increasing number of the population moving to an urban area and abandon their agricultural job in order to find a new career.
This
 result in a shortage of manpower in the farming sector and cities become overcrowd.
This
 essay proposes introducing modern farming machines and automation technology,
in addition
 ,countrydes'countryside's development subsidy as the solution. The migration to more developed cities means more opportunities
this
 attracts a large number of
people
, as a consequence, fewer
people
 are left working in agricultural businesses.
This
 shortage makes farm owners have to pay extra for machines that they don't familiar with,
thus
 increase food prices and cause effectiveness to fall.
For Instance
 the rising of rice prices back in the 2000s. Subsidising the rural area is the answer to
this
 problem. Develop more in a regional centre can make more jobs and other qualities of life available for
people
 who live doesn't live in the cities,
as a result
 , more
people
 will stay at their home town continue to work in a farm. In conclusion ,
people
 migration can make the agricultural business downfall but with propper development in the regional centre and countrysides, we can solve
this
 problem.
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