Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Music
has been a part of our lives for centuries. It is often claimed that
music
can connect
people
from different backgrounds while some argue against
this
opinion. I somewhat agree with that statement. On the one hand,
music
can be an excellent tool for socialisation, making it easier to interact with
people
who you barely know.
For instance
,
music
is an important essence for parties to be enjoyable in some cultures. Without it, the party would be quiet, and there would be no dancing. In these situations,
people
might become less excited and less likely to initiate conversations with unfamiliar persons, especially with those whose cultural background is different.
Additionally
, famous songs are frequently appreciated by any age group from the young to the elderly.
This
will help
people
start talking about the famous songs, finding sympathy and becoming closer to each other even though there is a large gap between their ages.
On the other hand
,
this
is not always the case that
music
enhances
people
bonding. In Japan,
for example
,
music
is not as popular as in other countries since there is no dance culture, and the Japanese tend to prefer a quiet and calm environment rather than exciting surroundings
such
as listening to loud and high tempo
music
.
Furthermore
, the Japanese tend to be into
music
more during their adolescence.
Therefore
, the generation gap in their preferred
music
types cannot be avoided.
This
makes it difficult to chat about the songs which they like with
people
in different age groups;
thus
, using
music
as one of the tools for communication would not be feasible. In summary,
music
has the potential to connect
people
all over the world
although
some limitations exist.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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