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When we meet someone for first time, we generally decide very quickly what kind of person we think they are and if we like them or not? Is this good or bad thing?

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People often judge others quickly at first meeting, which is quite normal as
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 is human
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. I believe making an impression of some one
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 could be inaccurate. It is a negative approach. I will present my point of view in
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 paragraphs.
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 with, all human beings are different
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, so their way of dealing with each other
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 changes. Some could be reserved
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 or a sense of insecurity, which stops them from being socialised. They want to observe first before opening up.
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, new admissions in the school are mostly reserved
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 seem quite arrogant , but over time , they expose how deep,kind, helping
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 is.
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, we have to give some time to get familiar.
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, swift judgment can sometimes be useful. Human
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 is to protect themselves, so they try to interact less
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. They first want to familiarize the surroundings.
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, in hostels where there are a number of students in one room without knowing each other personally at the start, they are strangers, so they make a judgment on the basis of their appearance,but by the end of the session, they become good friends.
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, where there is influence of digital technology, individuals personal life is in danger. Many cases are observed where people ask for a mobile just to make a call in a friendly way, and misuse the private data . In conclusion, it is a positive approach if someone makes quick judgments about strangers. It could be a sense of security and human
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Answer both parts more clearly. Say why quick judging is bad or good, and keep the same view from start to end.
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Your main idea changes. In the body you say it is negative, but in the end you say it is positive. Keep one clear position.
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Give fuller support for each main point. Some ideas are short, and the phone example is not fully linked to first meeting.
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Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph so the reader can follow your ideas more easily.
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Link ideas more smoothly. Some sentences jump fast from one point to another.
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Make examples simpler and more direct. Explain how each example supports your main point.
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You answer the topic and talk about quick judgment when meeting people for the first time.
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You include examples from school and hostel life, which helps show your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You use basic linking words like 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'On the other hand'.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • first impression
  • initial judgment
  • stereotypes
  • assess
  • non-verbal cues
  • body language
  • appearance
  • facade
  • misjudgments
  • unfair judgments
  • decision-making process
  • social situation
  • character
  • repeated interactions
  • open-mindedness
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