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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

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Youth crime is the most serious problem
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 be solved in our
society
. Teenage crimes are going to more aggressive and violent. One of the
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reason
reasons
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 childhood and adolescence are unique from other stages in that people in those stages are emotionally vulnerable and easily swayed by the circumstances around them
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 so that they are more likely to get involved in criminal activities.
In addition
, since the
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 family is being the standard, the time spent their peers is increasing.
This
 makes
children
 cannot decide rightly due to the fact that nobody
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 them how to behave properly.
That is
 to say, adult's supervision and education are needed for
children
 to behave correctly.
Firstly
,
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such
 as parents or elder siblings should spend many hours
to teach
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 correct values, beliefs and
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 their
children
.
This
 will be an opportunity to learn and behave correctly in
society
 for their
children
.
Secondly
, teachers at school must give
imformation
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information
 for as a member of
society
 required actions to their students. In
this
 way,
children
 will cognitive problems and behave correctly in
society
. Another potential solution to juvenile delinquency is to give harsh punishment to offenders.
This
 can work quickly because it is the most direct way to teach the child to repent their mistakes. Strong punishment can
also
 give an indirect warning message to other teenagers who may
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 the wrong path.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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