Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The loss of individual species of plants and
animals
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currently brings about harmful effects on the environment. While some people believe the levels of these problems should be strictly controlled and considered, I would argue that other factors play a major role in environmental problems. On the one hand, it is believed that particular species of plants and
animals
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are the main environmental problem.
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, since modern
life
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is getting busier than in the past, businesses tend to cut down trees, clear forests to get land for construction.
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,
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leads to erosion, landslides, floods.
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, plants are disappearing and no longer greening in the earth.
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, rare
animals
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are becoming more extinct due to overhunting and poaching by humans.
Animals
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help maintain the
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of nature
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so that their loss has a negative impact on our lives.
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, I believe that other environmental factors are more deserving of our attention. Pollution is a global hot issue attracting everyone.
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is because the current number of cars being manufactured and used is increasing, which causes high levels of exhausted fumes and makes air pollution become serious.
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, the phenomenon of ice melting causes
sea level
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rise, which directly affects human
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.
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, when the sea level increases above land, people have no home to live
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are submerged in the ocean.
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, many governments and scientists make an effort to find a solution to sustain human
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. Anyway, people tend to care more about personal interests than the community, so the factors that directly affect them
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as pollution, ice melting will attract stronger attention to them, and
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problem might bring about serious impacts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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