Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The loss of individual species of plants and

animals

currently brings about harmful effects on the environment. While some people believe the levels of these problems should be strictly controlled and considered, I would argue that other factors play a major role in environmental problems. On the one hand, it is believed that particular species of plants and

animals

are the main environmental problem.

Firstly

, since modern

life

is getting busier than in the past, businesses tend to cut down trees, clear forests to get land for construction.

Therefore

this

leads to erosion, landslides, floods.

As a result

, plants are disappearing and no longer greening in the earth.

Secondly

, rare

animals

are becoming more extinct due to overhunting and poaching by humans.

Animals

help maintain the

life

of nature

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so that their loss has a negative impact on our lives.

On the other hand

, I believe that other environmental factors are more deserving of our attention. Pollution is a global hot issue attracting everyone.

This

is because the current number of cars being manufactured and used is increasing, which causes high levels of exhausted fumes and makes air pollution become serious.

Furthermore

, the phenomenon of ice melting causes

sea level

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rise, which directly affects human

life

For example

, when the sea level increases above land, people have no home to live

and

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are submerged in the ocean.

Therefore

, many governments and scientists make an effort to find a solution to sustain human

life

. Anyway, people tend to care more about personal interests than the community, so the factors that directly affect them

such

as pollution, ice melting will attract stronger attention to them, and

this

problem might bring about serious impacts.

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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

the pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made. summerize the infromation by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures and make comparision where relevant.

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In recent years, there has been a noticeable trend in Vietnam towards adopting Western architectural styles in residential housing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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In some countries, there has been increase in the number of parents who are choosing to educate their children at home instead of sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh this disadvantages?