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Many Countries today are experiencing high levels of migration from rural areas to cities. What are the causes of this trend, and what effects does it have on the existing city dwellers?

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Due to high living standards and
job
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 opportunities, more and more people decide to leave their hinterlands and settle new lives in urban areas.
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 essay will discuss several reasons for
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 change, which has resulted in some negative consequences. The main reason behind
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 shift is
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 opportunities. Our world has been changed and developed over the past centuries, meaning that we need more
labor
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 forces to meet the demand, which results in more working
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. If people in rural areas are limited with agricultural work, they will experience a wide range of
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job
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 from different fields.
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, the living standard of the city is usually better than in the countryside, which can be clearly observed by the city’s high quality and quantity of public
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 as hospitals and schools. Prestigious schools and universities are usually located in big cities rather than the countryside. In many cases, patients must be transported to larger hospitals in the city due to a lack of necessary equipment.
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shift
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 could result in more serious consequences,
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 as overcrowding. The current infrastructure could not meet the demand of
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rapid
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 increase in the city’s population. It can be clearly seen through consecutive traffic congestions and living
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. Urban residents often suffer from
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 working
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 to get to higher
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,
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 study
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 to get to better schools and universities, and basic needs
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 as
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, fresh air due to population.
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, the trend might lead to overpopulation in big cities and a lack of
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 in rural areas. To conclude,
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 opportunities
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 the primary cause behind the trend of rushing out to the city for a better life, and overcrowding and pollution occur as the consequences of
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. The government and residents should ensure steps are taken to reduce
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 trend from increasing
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • rural depopulation
  • economic opportunities
  • infrastructure
  • livelihoods
  • overpopulation
  • cultural integration
  • affordability
  • public services
  • housing prices
  • workforce
  • economic growth
  • cultural diversity
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • basic services
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