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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial, perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what rneasures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

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, there are academic pressures on
children
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. Parental pressure is one of them where they force
children
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 to excel in technical subjects. They follow
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 to get a good job in the future. For that, they may call their teachers or lecturers and request their
children
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 to reach a desired academic achievement;
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, school or college teachers may force their
children
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 by giving lots of assignments and homework;
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, students face a lot of strain from their
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.
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,
children
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 may encounter social and commercial pressures. Socially,
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 of today are in a huge dilemma. The main reason is the discrepancy in culture adoption by both
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 and
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;
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, youth may dispute with their
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 in terms of culture. What is more, is the stress encounter by their peers.
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,
children
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 when observing the cutting-edge models of mobile phones they intend to purchase them. When they are unable to do so, they get stressed. There are some solutions to solve the provided problems.
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,
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 should recognize the pupils’ interests and promote them according to their wishes so that they can reach out to their career goals with ease;
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,
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 can share their personal experiences so that
children
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 can listen to them. Whenever
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 they try to provide explanations for their statements they may be harmonious with their
parents
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. To conclude, there is no doubt that
children
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 experience lots of pressure;
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, we could ameliorate
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 by following some steps mentioned in previous paragraphs.
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