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The world should have only one government rather than a national government for each country. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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The world should be governed by a single administration
instead
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 of having different state control for each country.
Although
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 it may sound beneficial on the surface level, I believe
this
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 idea is largely problematic and unattainable. Advocates of the practice may think of the opportunity as a means to galvanize global efforts for large-scale problems, climate change, or health crises
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. A centralized government could better protect the environment by enacting strict legislation against the burning of fossil fuels and force all citizens to get vaccinated against Covid-19. Seemingly, gathered support from every country around the world seems to weigh more than national attempts when dealing with these serious worldwide issues, so in hypothetical terms, so unilateral a power could have a lot of potentials to achieve a tremendous end.
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, it is nearly impossible for every country to agree on one government in the reality. The world now has many regimes that are run by distinctive ideologies,
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 as communism, socialism, capitalism,...; these by far do not seem to mix well in a combined leadership, so conflicts between groups of different believes will be inevitable.
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, humans are psychologically and naturally bound to have distinguished ideas on just about everything,
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 enforcing every person to follow a single way of ruling is against the freedom of ideology pursuit,
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 go against basic human rights. In conclusion, a single government for the entire planet could help resolve global issues but would ultimately contradict the fundamental values that we have constructed in the history of human society.
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, the mentioned idea might propose more problems than possible merits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • centralized policies
  • international cooperation
  • global economy
  • trade barriers
  • military spending
  • authoritarian control
  • cultural diversity
  • national identities
  • local issues
  • homogenized
  • decision-making
  • democratic representation
  • world peacekeeping force
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