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There is a sports stadium near your home where large number of people come to watch games each weekend. This cause you and your neighbours some problems. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter- -Explain who you are and where you live -Describe the Problem -Suggest what the local council should do

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
this
 message finds you well. My name is [Your Name], and I reside at [Your Address], situated near the sports field at [Stadium Address].
While
 the stadium generates excitement and fosters community engagement, the influx of spectators each weekend has begun to create significant challenges for my neighbours and me. The foremost issue we encounter is the excessive noise produced by the crowds and event activities. The cheers, music, and post-game celebrations often extend late into the night, disrupting our peace and making it difficult for families with young children to rest.
Moreover
, the sheer volume of attendees contributes to littering in our neighbourhood, compromising the cleanliness and visual appeal of our inhabitants. To address these concerns, I propose several actionable measures for the local council.
Firstly
, organizing a cleanup initiative post-events could enhance the cleanliness of our area, engaging local volunteers and fostering a sense of community responsibility.
Additionally
, installing noise barriers around the ground could effectively mitigate sound transmission to adjacent neighbourhoods.
Lastly
, a public awareness campaign emphasizing the importance of respecting the local environment would encourage more responsible behaviour among attendees. Thank you for your attention to these matters. I hope my suggestions will facilitate a more harmonious relationship between the stadium and our society. Sincerely, Mohit
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task achievement
While the letter is concise and clear, providing more specific examples of the 'significant challenges' or potential consequences could add depth to the response.
coherence and cohesion
Some attempts to explain how the suggested measures address the problems could enhance logical cohesion.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is well-organized with a clear structure, making it easy to follow the argument.
task achievement
The tone is appropriate and polite, fitting the purpose of the letter well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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