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Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly negative impact on local inhabitants and the environment. However, others claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that
tourism
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 is important for the economy of any
country
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. Some folks believe that because
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 affecting their lives while some say that it,s good for the growth of any nation. I,
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 personally beside with the latter view and I am going to discuss the pros and cons of
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 in upcoming paragraphs.
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 with, some
people
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 think that
tourism
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 has a negative effect on their everyday lives and they have their own personal views on it.
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 they think that the
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 coming from different countries may take some diseases with them especially virus diseases. I still remember back in 2020 when
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 blamed Chinese
people
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 for bringing COVID-19 into their
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 and it greatly affected the
tourism
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 of that
country
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. On the flip side, masses who think that
tourism
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 has a good impact on their
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 give their point as.
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 it affects the growth of that nation, more
tourism
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 means more profit to the
country
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 and local
people
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 who have small businesses especially run by tourists.
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, according to the survey of
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 gallary, 43 per cent of small businesses getting benefit from tourists and they are still in because of them. According to my, it's good for the growth of any
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. It shows that the
people
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 in that
country
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 may have something special that's attractive to tourists, for ,example their culture, food or even hospitality. So in the
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, I think it's good for the prosperity of that nation. Here we can clearly see that the pros outweigh the cons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • local inhabitants
  • economy
  • boosts
  • cultural exchange
  • preservation
  • restoration
  • environmental degradation
  • overcrowding
  • strain
  • infrastructure
  • cultural dilution
  • commercialized
  • economic dependence
  • sustainable tourism
  • mitigate
  • adverse effects
  • regulation
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