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Many people think that the best way to learn a culture is to learn the language of it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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How can we learn more about a specific
culture
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? There are several ways to become aware
about
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 cultures
such
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 as, living among the
people
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 and reading the history and
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nowadays
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 searching on
internet
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the internet
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.
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, learning the local
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language
 plays a significant role in understanding
culture
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 in more depth. I agree that
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learning
 a
language
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 is the best way to getting knowledge about the
culture
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the importance of
language
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 in
culture
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 and how it
assist
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 outsider to understand the customs more deeply.
Language
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 plays a significant role in developing and understanding
culture
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. It can be said that it is the foundation of any
culture
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. If a person
learn
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 a
language
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,
than
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then
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understaning
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understanding
 a
culture
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 becomes a
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piece
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peace
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piece
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 of cake for that individual. When a person
learn
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learns
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 a native
language
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, the
people
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 of that
culture
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 welcomes him with
open
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an open
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 heart. If it becomes easy for the local
people
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 to communicate
than
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then
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 they can easily share their daily activities with them.
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, by knowing the
language
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 outsider
also
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 does not feel alienated among the community. Understanding and expressing the views, ideas and issues
becomes
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 easy on both sides. Learning a
language
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 helps
creating
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 and
strengthing
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 the connection with the
culture
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.
Community
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The community
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 feel valued and respected and vice versa.
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,
language
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 breaks the barriers of the
culture
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,
relgion
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religion
, race, etc and develop a strong bond among outsiders and the native speakers.
Hence
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, mitigating the risk of creating unseen
boundries
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boundaries
 among
people
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. To infer,
language
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 plays a vital role in shaping the
culture
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 and a person can better understand a
culture
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 if he is able to learn the
language
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. It leaves
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positive
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 impression of
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an outsider
the outsider
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outsider
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 in the minds of the local group.
Language
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further
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 enhances the relationship among
indivual
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individual
 and making strong ties till generations to come.
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