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Some people believe that children should do sports so that they will grow up as healthy adults, but others feel sports are just about enjoying yourself. Discuss these both views and give your own opinion.

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It is an
undoubtable
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undebatable
undoubtedly
 fact that
sports
is
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 very important for
children
 which help to give them a healthy life while there are some who believe that
sports
 will only help to parents to enjoy and giving freedom. In
this
essay
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 we will discuss both the opinion before
come
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 to any final conclusion.
Although
 sport is significant for our
children
 but excess participation in
sport
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 activities will distract
children
’s educational performance and by the passage of
time
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 it would
difficult
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 to cover the gap between both.
Moreover
, once
children
 get used
too
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to
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 with free time in
sports
, will
hard
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 to bring them
for
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 their studies or cover their weaknesses. It is pertinent to
mentioned
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 that often parents do feel comfortable involving their
children
 in long hours of
sports
 because they feel some freedom from their busy lives. Despite
the
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all opinion,
sports
 helps
children
 to keep healthy and grow fast and its irrefutable fact that mentally fit kids easily excel in their career rather than those who not doing any exercise or
sports
.
Furthermore
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 those
children
more
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are more
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 active than those who
not
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do not
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 participate in any
sports
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therefore
 parents feel more activities and extra curriculum games will increase
children
 analytical performance at studies In the light of above, in my
opinion
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 I would prefer to get involved
children
 more in
sports
 activities so they will perform well in rest of their life
,
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 but should be
limitation
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 for everything.
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