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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad?

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In recent time, the rate of
people
migrate
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 to other countries for employment and higher studies have been drastically rising. Immigration from the own
country
 considering their future have pros and cons.
Firstly
,
people
 would become more knowledgable in future due to
know
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 other culture, language and etc., As well as they want to face some issues like freedom, support and etc
,.
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 The point worthy to notice is that personal benefits while moving other reginal
people
 would get chance to mingle with different
people
. That would encourage to knew the multiple languages, history, culture and etc. If the person is going to move to another region, definitely he is going to pay high comparing with own region. It would change the individual person lifestyle and wealth.
For instance
, my friend has moved to Canada in 2015 for his career. Now he is getting almost 70% higher than me. Even, we both are same grade level in college.
Furthermore
, migrated
people
 can't expect that much support from that moved
country
, how they treated by the won region. As like, they should not meet their family and friends easily, whenever they required, because of big process and cost.
For example
, a maximum of Indian
people
are
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 moving to Gulf countries from labour to engineer. Though due to the roles and restrictions, even they can not command in street
at
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whenever required and they should keep all restrictions as required in that
country
. To conclude, migration to other
country
 have economic growth and personally drops.
Hence
, it has both advantages and disadvantages. Even so,
people
 should think
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all elements before moving to another
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