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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message ?

#cultures #children #message
Children
 that
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 up in some cultures are often told if they try hard enough, they will get anything they want.
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 might encourage them to work hard and keep trying until they achieve it.
On the other hand
,
children
 could suffer from
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 health problems after pressure themselves not to fail again. A decision to carry on trying is a key factor for
achieve
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 success in any
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. Despite these ways of thinking have developed since
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 young age. In
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 the parents took a major role
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 creating their
child
's
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 in childhood.
For example
, if a father and a mother let their
child
 learnt about the failure and not give up too soon.
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, let
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 achieve some small task
first
,
children
 would raise their self-assured and become more independent. Nothing seems to be easy nowadays, no matter
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 you are. Many
children
taught
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 to be tough and ambitious in any
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. But someone could not bear that and lead to self-deprecating. A
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 to happen more common these days. Depression or any
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metal
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heath
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 issue
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from
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 few chemicals in their brain but
also
 context surrounded them. Asian high school students took an extra tutoring class after normal school hours
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 and on the weekend as well. Some parents just put their
child
 really hard for getting
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 top school. for.
Thus
 these students suffer from endless sleepiness hours and unhealthy mental problems that pressured them. In conclusion,
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children
often
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 told to try hard enough so they can achieve anything they want could be effective
depend
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 on each
child
's personality. An over self-pressure could cause a
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mental
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metal
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the
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 young age. The most important is they know
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how much they need
this
 and how hard they have tried for it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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