Some experts believe it is better for animals to live in zoos where they are safe and are given all the food they need Do you think that living in zoos has more advantages or more disadvantages for animals?

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Nowadays, it is common that confined spaces
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can be found in any country. On the upside, keeping many types of
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in a
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might be good enough, while taking
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under control has disadvantages too. In
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could be implemented.
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the beginning, zoos have several advantages.
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, they play an important role to save endangered
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, like
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a panda
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or white
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, where they are protected from habitat loss, starvation and predators.
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, in a
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,
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allow researchers and scientists to obtain a better understanding of the way
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live rather than chasing them in
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, zoos can be educational, teaching children and
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about
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and the way they live. Especially biology teachers may reunite their lesson in a
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to encourage the students to take care of
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.
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, zoos have several disadvantages. At
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,
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suffer from stress and boredom in captivity when there is a lack of space.
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,
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might die earlier in restricted space according to the article in the “Nature” magazine.
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case, some people consider themselves to be unethical for keeping
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in a
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Human
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being does not have the right have
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for fun or investigation. In conclusion, it is good to preserve
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in a
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, while others think that
animals
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should not depend on peoples’ needs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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