Some scientist think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

With the advent of technology, some
scientists
are in the search of aliens on other planets and are in
a
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thought of contacting them via sending messages. But other
scientists
are of the opinion of
this
being a bad idea and can be proven dreadful.
this
essay intends to talk about both of these sides.
To begin
with, it would not be surprising at all if
scientists
discover the existence of aliens
creatures
on other planets because technology has advanced so much with the passage of time. Many are of opinion that their discovery will do good to humankind and
science
stream itself as it has been evident that the
earth
is the only life-supporting body.
Furthermore
,space
science
would like to extend its reach to these matters.
For instance
, one can see on youtube, the videos of UFOs being on the
earth
's surface though there is no solid evidence of the same
but
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so there is
also
a special place called "Area 51" by American
scientists
as they believe the presence of unknown
creatures
.
Moreover
, most of the
scientists
would like to have their names recorded in the books of coming history to be known by the whole world.
However
,
this
goes by a saying that,"curiosity kills the cat" as some
scientists
believes
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that they should not make a contact with these unknown fictional
creatures
if they exist in reality. I stand by
this
opinion. Even though
,
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there has been so much advancement in space
science
but we do not even actually know what type of outcome will be there if we got to know them.
Science
has not even found the way out of saving the
earth
if some heavenly body hits
earth
, left alone to make contact with the known
creatures
who are doubtful. And one main fact is that these discoveries are bound to be very expensive so it is better to make human life better than discovering unknowns. To summarise the above matter, I do say, even though it will be good and a proud moment for
scientists
to discover aliens but to make some sort of connection would not be necessary enough.
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