You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Dear Sally, I have
recived
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received
your letter, and I
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glap
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glad
you are doing well.
Also
, I thank you for taking me into confidence in order to consult about a decision as important as either getting a job or going to a college. To be honest,
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think you
shoul
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should
not enjoy
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you continue going to college. Because, when we
studies
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together you always want
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to travel
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all the world and I can see you really enjoy when you are yourself. In my opinion, I can see your special ability so I strongly support you to find a job that you are suitable for. And one more thing important is you can faster earn money
then
you can help your brother grow up.
On the other hand
, I always suggest you become a tour guide. Because your English
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good and you are very knowledgeable about geography. It makes sense because you will easily find work all over the world and it will help you to understand all the cultures of your
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countries. I hope my suggestion would help you decide what is best for you. Best regard, Rose lee
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Juncture
  • Firsthand
  • Practical skills
  • Theoretical focus
  • Financial independence
  • Career advancement
  • Real-world experience
  • Part-time studies
  • Online courses
  • Financial stability
  • Career goals
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