You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Dear Sally, I have
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your letter, and I
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glap
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you are doing well.
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, I thank you for taking me into confidence in order to consult about a decision as important as either getting a job or going to a college. To be honest,
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think you
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not enjoy
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you continue going to college. Because, when we
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together you always want
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all the world and I can see you really enjoy when you are yourself. In my opinion, I can see your special ability so I strongly support you to find a job that you are suitable for. And one more thing important is you can faster earn money
then
you can help your brother grow up.
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, I always suggest you become a tour guide. Because your English
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good and you are very knowledgeable about geography. It makes sense because you will easily find work all over the world and it will help you to understand all the cultures of your
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countries. I hope my suggestion would help you decide what is best for you. Best regard, Rose lee
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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