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In most countries, there is an age limit at which people are permitted to drive, but no age limit for drivers. Some experts have proposed that drivers be aged between 20 to 70. Why they have proposed that? What are the drawbacks of this proposal?

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It is clear that in modern life in many countries there are
age
 restrictions for obtaining a driver's license and there are no
such
 restrictions for driving. Some people think that
this
 is a lie and the driver's
age
 should be from 20 to 70 years, but others do not agree with
this
. I support the
second
 opinion. Like everything else in the world,
this
 has positive and negative sides. In
this
 essay, I will describe the disadvantages of
this
 proposal, but I
also
 have to say about the advantages. The most important consequence of the fact that drivers do not have
age
 restrictions is the qualification of drivers. It is obvious that children's ability to study and their memory is better than that of adults.
For example
, if a boy or girl likes mechanics, cars and different types of cars,
this
 child will naturally be interested in driving from childhood.
However
, of course, it must be a child from the
age
 of 14.
In addition
,
this
 proposal has many disadvantages.
Firstly
, a person under the
age
 of 20 is not psychologically developed for
such
 activities. It may seem fun and easy, but driving is a great stress for the human body. Driving a
car
 requires a lot of concentration and attention. While children do not have
such
 internal organs. Psychologist Andrey Stavrinsky said that teenagers may seem like adults, but they are mentally immature. And
this
 can affect their mental health. The
second
 disadvantage of the point that there is no
age
 limit for drivers is the growing number of
car
 accidents. As I wrote earlier, children are not mentally developed for
this
 activity, the same situation occurs with people after 70 years. They may lose control and get into a
car
 accident.
For example
,
car
 accident statistics in Iowa show that 20 per cent of all accidents were committed by people aged 17 to 75 years.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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