students are becoming more and more reliant on the internet.while the internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. how far do you agree with this statement?

It is an irrefutable fact, technology has become one of the key elements of our lives, especially the
internet
. There is an increasing trend of using
the
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online resources in educational institutions and undoubtedly, it's very convenient for
students
in their studies and for their research work. While
,
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it has some negative impacts and drawbacks in adopting for the educational purpose. Before coming to some conclusion
this
essay will discuss both the effects.
Firstly
, the
internet
has provided
students
with a platform, where they can get online resources to learn according to their subjects. There is an option to get online tutors, who assist them to enhance their knowledge in specific and weak areas.
Moreover
, the
internet
is the best platform for those who can not attend on-campus classes.
For instance
, there are various websites that provide course content and live assistance.
Secondly
, nowadays online browsing is easily accessible to everyone, which has a huge drawback on society, as well as on
students
in universities or those who are in school.
Furthermore
, It is hard to find out which online services are good for
students
and suitable for educational purposes.
For example
, When we are using the
internet
there are multiple social networking sites that distract us easy. In a conclusion, considering both the views mentioned above, in my opinion, I moderately agree that the
internet
provides various opportunities for the pupil to enhance their knowledge, and importantly for those who have minimum resources could get online education because it is economical. Despite, having negative effects, it should not be restricted for educational purposes.
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