The diagrams below show the existing ground floor plan of a house and a proposed plan for some building work. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The diagrams illustrate the current
plan
for the ground floor
of a house and another one
which contains expecting
changes for some building Wrong verb form
expected
structure
.
Take an Fix the agreement mistake
structures
overall
look, both plans have a kitchen
on the left and a living room on the other side and there are stairs for the two counterparts.
In particular
, relating to infrastructure, the kitchen
in the existing floor
plan
is more basic whilst there is kitchen
furniture in the proposed one
. Moreover
, the stairs in the second
diagram are more complicated which
create a curve from the ground to reach the upper Correct word choice
and
floor
; meanwhile, the initial stairs are only a line from the first to the second
floor
, which locate beside the hall and include a
storage under.
Remove the article
apply
Turn
to the core of the house, the internal doors are distinctive. Particularly, the counterparts are behind the hall in the first Wrong verb form
Turning
plan
, one
leads to the kitchen
and one
to the living room; while
the doors are next
to the entrance door and both lead to the kitchen
. In the first plan
, there are two internal walls whilst there is just one
in the other.Submitted by hnphu79 on
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