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We have developed into throwaway society. What can be done to over come this problem?

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We are moving through a consumeristic
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, and we have developed
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 ne culture of ‘use and throw’,
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 and the society.
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 these hurdles can be overcome with proper management of
waste
 and optimum utilization of resources.
This
 essay will discuss few issues and the solutions for the same. On the one hand, reusing and recycling all the possible items should be made
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a habit. Plastic bags are the best example, we can reuse these bags multiple times, if it is not possible
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dispose
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 in the proper way, in the bins provided for recycling materials. Electronic
waste
 is another big challenge we are facing. The only solution to
this
 issue is to consume only the needed electronic gadgets and
also
 use the product if it can be repaired.
On the other hand
, the government should issue strict guidelines to corporates for following the green protocol. Recycling units should be made mandatory at the factories to reduce
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waste
 dumping.
Also
 by increasing the quality of the product, since we know that Chinese toys are cheaper, but
quality
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 is very less which will lead to piling of plastic wastes. The government should
also
 install
waste
 categorized
waste
 bins at all the public places
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 so that it creates a good culture among the citizens. To recapitulate, recycling and reusing the products can reduce the throwaway culture to a far extent,
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 Government and corporates are having equal responsibility in
this
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