You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter: explain what you like bout the cafeteria say what is wrong suggest how it could be improved

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Hello sir/ madam,

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is James Austin

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-year student of

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college studying in the political science batch .I am writing on the behalf of student union regarding the cafeteria of the college.

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letter is to inform the management that though the ambience and seating area of

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cafe is quite good but there are certain points that I want that college authorities should pay attention

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, the quality of food or snacks served there is not of good quality, a number of students have complained regarding stomachache after having lunch at

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place.

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, the cook on the premises doesn’t use all safety measures related to hygiene.

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,the most important thing is that cutlery or plates used for serving snacks in the canteen should disposable.

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,there is a suggestion by the majority of students protein diet and salads should be added to the menu.Major consideration should be given to the health of students. Hope you will take interest in my suggestions for the improvement of the cafeteria. Yours thankfully,

Jagjot

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Jagjit

Kaur.

Submitted by dr.jotdhaliwal on Tue Sep 28 2021

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