Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, technology is playing a greater and greater role in any
kinds
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of
activities
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Everyday
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people
use their smartphones or laptops and look for the latest information.
Traditional
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method
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methods
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of reading news remained in the past, but
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there are
people
who believe that
newspapers
are useful
to
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.
To begin
with, in the past century
newspapers
played
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role as a source of information, nowadays plenty of things has changed,
people
prefer to surf the Internet or to watch a TV than reading papers.
As a result
,
newspaper
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the newspaper
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has lost
it’s
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popularity since technological progress
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provided
people
with new opportunities for discovering the changes in the world. It is
obviously
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that online reading has many benefits,
such
as convenience and bunch of information on any topics,
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newspapers
are a bit limited with its variety. Recently
people
faced
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many environmental issues which are caused by human activity. If humans want to prevent global problems they should find alternatives to everyday items
such
as
newspapers
. A great example of preventing paper waste showed
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government, they strongly recommended
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kindle books at schools
instead
of traditional. They
also
gave each student a laptop to use
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during lessons or to find some specific facts.
This
trick made
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process even more entertaining and less harmful to the environment. To sum up, I totally disagree that
newspapers
are the main source of knowledge and I don’t see any necessity of using them. There are
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of choices
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are suitable, modern and even helpful enough.
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