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Many people living in cities these days do not get enough physical exercise. What are the causes of this? What are the SOLUTIONS?

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It is argued that living in urban areas blame for
lack
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 of physical activity between human populations.
This
 essay will discuss
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the fundamental
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 causes of
this
 problem and find some possible solutions for it. Having
hectic
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a hectic
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 lifestyle and living in industrial cities are
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the main
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 reasons that
people
 who have been living there take less attention to doing regular activity .
First
 of all, It is undeniable that all of us have really busy
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seclude
, we have to work nine to five for satisfied what our family needed,
thus
, we can not find some hours to do sport and we prefer to spend our spare time for resting at home or spend with
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our
 family and friends. The other cause for the given issue is that
,
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 the atmosphere of capital cities force
people
 to use their own cars or public transportations
such
 as
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busses
byssus
, trains and etc.
For instance
,
people
 who have been lived in cities
,
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 thought that if we used bikes
instead
 of vehicles, we would lose some hours
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 the road and the risk of accidents would be increased. There are some solutions for problems which I mentioned before like raising public awareness and encourage young adults to do regular
exercise
 from an early age. Raising public awareness about positive aspects of
exercise
 might be beneficial to give
people
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motivations
motivation
 for doing sport even in their apartment which located in the city
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. Many programs were created to extend human's knowledge in the past and
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fortunately
unfortunately
 they put positive effects. Especially noteworthy is that, doctors play a vital role in their patient's
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, they can patients that there is a strong relation between doing sports frequently and getting away from many diseases like blood pressure and heart attack. Teachers can encourage children to do
exercise
 from young
ages
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, as a consequence, when students will become older, they'll do
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physical
 activities in their routine life. to conclude,
although
 living in the urban areas blame for lack of
exercise
 but there are some ways that must be taken into consideration to solve
this
 popular problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyles
  • desk-bound jobs
  • fast-paced urban life
  • conveniences
  • physical exertion
  • barrier
  • densely populated
  • pollution
  • safety concerns
  • urban planning
  • pedestrian areas
  • cycle lanes
  • accessible
  • workplace wellness programs
  • subsidize
  • financial barriers
  • public awareness
  • incorporate
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