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With the increasing popularity of calculators and computers,sstudent literacy is decreasing dramatically. What are the positive and negative effects the progress of science and technology brought about

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this
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technology
become
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integral
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 part of
individual's
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Life
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.
This
 lead to declining in pupil literacy skill.
This
 advancement has both benefits and drawbacks which shall be explained in
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 paragraphs before reaching a relevant conclusion. To
commemce
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 with, Sharing the positive side of
this
 approach
then
firstly
, it consumes less time for any
work
 purpose. Students are complete their
work
 in
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 convenient way and without facing any problem with help of modern
technology
.
For instance
, learners complete many of their assignments, project works as well as notes
in
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 period of time.
Secondly
, it reduces manual
work
.
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 is no need for pupils to do any hard
work
 in
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, they
done
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 their all
work
 on these type of gadgets.
This
 helps in releasing
burden
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 from them.
Thus
 above-mentioned are the unmatched benefits of
advancement
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 of
science
 and
technology
.
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Conversely
 ,
dominance
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 of
technology
 in student's life comes with its own downside. Primarily, the most use of
science
 and
technology
 gadgets whether it be computers, calculators
are tends
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 to weakness in the
students
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 eyesight. Blue light emitted from these
type
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 of visual graphics can damage the cornea of the eye which causes
myopi
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myopia
myopic
 and
metrophia
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ametropia
.
Subsequently
, excessive use of
technology
 can plummet the creative skills of the learners.
This
 would
be result
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 in without these gadgets they cannot do
work
 properly and efficiently. They become highly dependent on
science
 and
technology
.
Thus
 these drawbacks somehow stain the positive impact of
technology
 upliftment. To conclude, the advancement of
science
 and
technology
 has both pros in terms of consume less time and reduce manual
work
 and the cons of
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 eyesight and decrease in creative skills.
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