In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
a lots
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of parents prefer to pay for
home
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teacher
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and let their children accept
educate
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at
home
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and are not like to send them to
school
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. In my opinion, go to
school
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will get lots of skills for me than stay at
home
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.
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, the reason why we need to go to
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is that we can
learned
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community ability at
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, it is the skill that you are
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learned
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at
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. When the students find
the
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vocation in the future,
communicate
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skill is must
to
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be.
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reason is
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because
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it.
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, pressure is important when we study at
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, too much pressure will
killed
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a person, it will
brings
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some scared emotion to us, like anxiety and depression.
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, some stress can help us has more diligent to finish our homework or test.
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, compare with each other is a common situation that we are likely to have, it
also
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brings lots of stress for everyone, but
this
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is a brilliant experience. In conclusion, study at
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are
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likely
cause
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a person does not connect with society, it is
worsley
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worse
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, and educate at
school
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with classmate and friends
has
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many benefit that you cannot
to
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