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Many people aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it.What are the causes of this? How to overcome this problem

#people #aim #balance #work #lives
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of
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life
, everyone wants to be independent.Some people are able to manage their professional and personal
life
.
However
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 others may find it difficult to keep balance.
This
 essay will
elucidates
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 that
complexity
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the complexity
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 of
work
 and inflation are rudimentary causes of it and it will suggest some potential
measurs
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measures
 to tackle
this
. To commence with, there are numerous factors that make people prioritise their
work
 over family.
Firstly
, due to
complex
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 nature of
work
, people are spending
much
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time
 at their office.
This
 extended working
hours
are not only create
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 conflict in their personal relations but
also
 reduce
the
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productivity. A study by
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Harward University revealed that
twenty- five
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percent
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per cent
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 of workers who spend maximum
time
 at their workplace are either going through depression or any serious health issues.
Moreover
, inflation is the other contributing factor to disturb
life
. Because of
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of
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in
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price
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 of goods and services , employees are working extra
hours
 to get more money that
able
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 to safeguard
a
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 better future
of
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 their kids. Taking into consideration all the aforementioned reasons, measures to solve
this
 be
constructively
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. The
govenment
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government
 should impose strict
law
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laws
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 to fix the working
hours
, those who find to
work
 more
hours
 will be penalized.
For
instance
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 parents who spend more
time
 with their kids are
perfome
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perform
performed
 excellent in their office. Apart from
this
, employers must give long holidays so they can spend
time
 with their families which resulting in strengthening their bond and alleviate their stress. To conclude, it can be stated that workload and hiking in prices of basic things are
striking
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factor
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 of
work
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work-life
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life
 imbalance which can be resolved by engaging individuals into recreational
activies
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activities
.
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