The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Currently, it is an urgent topic about single-sex marriage. While some people consider that it is unacceptable in society, others believe that it is natural and should be encouraged. In my opinion, the gay should have an

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why it should be legal is

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, if people with any orientation have equal conditions, it will probably lead to the fact that

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will become more understanding.

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, in America, gay can be married legally.

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, it can make people happier and more inspired. Not only equality is a good aspect of gay marriage, but

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positive effect on mental health. A good illustration of

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relationship with whom he loved because it was not legally.

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have difficulties in countries where it is not legal.

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someone who has the same gender, he will probably have to cover his feelings.

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cause of stress and depression. In conclusion, single-sex marriage is quite common in some countries. In my opinion, governments should make it possible for gay to be married and be happy.

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