Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned while others disagree. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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that extreme
sport
needs to be prohibited,
however
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others contradict
to
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this
opinion.
On
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my point of view,
extreme
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sport
has no place to be and
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essay will discuss
about
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how it makes potential injuries to mental and physical
health
. The myriads of competitive sports are life
threating
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threatening
and there should be rejected by people. While experiencing box, wrestling everyone
have
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a risk of taking a serious
health
problem. My cousin who was
amateur
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boxer in
younger
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their younger
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years had
brain
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concussion in the competition and it
lead
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to
end
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of the career of
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athlete.
In other words
, everyone can do the
sport
, but keeping yourself and avoiding losing
the
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health
probably
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expensive than
an
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any
entertainment
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. Once brought disease will follow you until the end. Competitive
sport
influences your well-being and improves teamwork,
however
from
enjoyable
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one
, it can turn into
an
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anxiety which increasingly
effect
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on
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mental
health
.
For instance
, elite sportsmen
freqently
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frequently
face
with
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various specific
steressors
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stressors
in
surrounding
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the surrounding
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world. Losing in
one
competition might mean all,
thus
lead to depression which is negatively impacting
for
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motivation. To
conclide
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conclude
, there are specific drawbacks to avoid doing
sport
in life, keeping your mental and physical
health
are
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essential,
however
to
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be honest,
sport
is
a
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one
of the
solution
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solutions
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to be well-built, so doing
sport
without competition is
is
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helpful rather than
other
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one
.
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