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Increasing number of schools providing laptops and tablets replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments, Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

#schools #laptops #tablets #books #materials #exams #assignments
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In the current environment,
students
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 are provided with
laptops
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 and tablets, and they are moving away from
books
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 and other printed materials like exams and assignments. Let's discuss the pros and cons of both learning trends. One of the main benefits of learning with
laptops
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 and tablets is that
students
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 can make use of
internet
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the internet
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 which has
plethora
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 of information.
Students
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 can do their research and create their own websites where they can efficiently organize their work.
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 advantage is that
students
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 can showcase their creativity using the social media tools like YouTube channel, Facebook live etc. where they can get instant feedback and appreciation for their work.
On the other hand
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, there are certain drawbacks of learning with
laptops
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 and tablets and moving away from
books
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 and other printed materials like exams and assignments.
Students
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 are getting hooked to gadgets, social media and there are some harmful effects to their body e.g., spectacles at
early
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 age, compulsive disorder etc. Another drawback is that
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 are not making use of resourceful libraries where they can educate themselves with readily available knowledge. In conclusion,
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 of gadgets and
laptops
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 for learning carries benefits compared to
books
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 and other printed materials like exams and assignments.
However
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, there is
need
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of
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balanced
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a balanced
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 approach on the way of learning to be provided to the
students
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.
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The toddlers
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Toddlers
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Toddler
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 to teenager age group should be leveraged with
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 and printed learning so that they are saved from harmful effects and can get practical learning.
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students
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 need to
provided
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 with gadgets and
laptops
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 to enhance their learning by understanding the latest trends.
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