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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that nowadays the access of remote areas is inclined by travellers and scientists .
Hence
,
i
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 believe that its advantages are overlapping its disadvantages On the one hand,sometimes
its
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 very risky to go
on
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to
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 natural
places
 .masses can not judge the
loaction
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location
 of animals so animals can jump from anywhere else which puts human life
in
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 risk.
Furthermore
,if the folks will get easy access
of
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 unpopulated areas
then
 they will start to make their homes over there and
also
 will start to introduce new business that leads to deforestation
On the other hand
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 think that visiting isolated natural areas have more benefits .
Firstly
 ,
people
 can get the knowledge about
remote
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the remote
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 area and can search
a lots
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 of crucial things .which would be
fruitfull
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fruitful
 for government to make new rules related to visiting
places
 that are natural .
Moreover
 ,travellers can locate the things which can be useful for
future
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the future
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 generation Moving
further
,travelling to newer
places
 is appealing because in
this
 modern era the vast majority of
people
 going to other cities and countries it becomes common in today’s time .
people
 prefer to go
on
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 unique
places
 that brings memorable moments .
Such
 as
amazon
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the amazon
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 rainforest in brazil .so
places
 like that gives
unforgettable
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 experience .scientists can study
about
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various types of plants and can get the seeds of that to
grown
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 in open spaces . To conclude,the benefits are more than drawbacks .As
people
 can gain knowledge and
experiece
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experience
 by visiting natural
places
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote natural environment
  • scientific research
  • climate change
  • environmental preservation
  • economic benefits
  • conservation efforts
  • habitat disruption
  • pollution
  • cultural disruption
  • indigenous populations
  • commercialization
  • safety risks
  • personal enrichment
  • ecosystems
  • awareness
  • appreciation for nature
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