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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might be this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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House
 is a primary need for any individual or family and it should be affordable. Some have,
therefore
, suggested
to purchase
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 a
house
instead
 of buying it.
This
 essay will discuss why people opt for
this
 and will explain my own view that it is advantageous. Owning a living space have many benefits, one of
them
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which
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 is
financial
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a financial
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 benefit. Since, in many
contries
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countries
, interest rates are very less, a person
end
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ends
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 up paying less mortgage than their rent and will have a home of their own. Canada,
for instance
,
offer
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offers
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 home loans at the interest rate of 2%, which is affordable
by
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for
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 most of their citizens.
This
 step is worthful though
at
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time
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the time
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 of purchase, it requires a lot of money to be available as
down
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a down
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 payment
..
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 In my view, it is going to be beneficial in long term. As people have
tendency
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 to manage their variable expenses, if they purchase a
house
, they will easily afford it.
Therefore
,
required
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 down payment can be managed easily. At the end of 20 years,
for example
, people paying rent will have nothing in hand but others who have bought
house
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a house
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 in past will have their own place to live
although
 they struggled a bit at the initial stage. In conclusion, indeed
house
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the house
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 is our basic necessity for living, it should be purchased not to be rented. In my view, buying will have positive outcomes as they will have
property
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a property
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 in their name and
on the other hand
,
loadgers
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lodgers
loaders
 had paid a large sum of money to others, which will not be of any use to them.
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