A friend told you recently that he/she had gone to an excellent restaurant. You wonder if this restaurant will be suitable for your birthday party next week. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter tell your friend about your planned party ask what the restaurant is called and for directions to get there ask what kind of food it serves and if your friend has any particular recommendations from the menu

Dear Pat, How is it going? Just want to update you regarding a party, that we have discussed, and ask a couple of questions about
this
fancy place you have visited recently. I am planning to have a birthday party on Saturday next week. Consider
this
letter an invitation to join it! I am going to invite everyone from our tight-knit school circle of friends and
also
some of my co-workers. So, I want to ask you, what is the name of
this
excellent
restaraunt
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you've been telling me about? I remember that it's located a few
kilometers
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away from our town, so it will be helpful
,
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if you can give me some directions
how
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to get there.
Also
, I want to ask you, is
this
restaraunt
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restaurant
tied to some national cuisine? Or do they actually have all kinds of dishes? Would be great, if you could share some positions from the menu, that you particularly liked, so I can order
it
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for everyone. Cheers, Valery
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coherence and cohesion
To improve logical structure, ensure each point flows clearly from one to the next. You may consider using linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your points smoothly.
task achievement
All parts of the prompt have been addressed, but you could enhance completeness by providing more detail about what kind of celebration you have in mind for better context.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are very warm and natural, suitable for a letter to a friend.
task achievement
The tone is friendly and appropriate for the context, maintaining a personal touch throughout the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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