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Describe a time when you gave advice to others You should say: When it was To whom you gave the advice What the advice was And explain why you gave the advice

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Giving
advice
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 is quite common in Korea. I
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 gave free
advice
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 to my near and dear ones. I personally believe that by giving
advice
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, we show our love and care toward others. Here I would like to talk about the
advice
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 which I gave to my friend Ryan. Three months ago, he was in a dilemma to continue his job or start his own
business
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. He is my best friend and whenever he feels low, he calls me to take on opinion. It was Friday night when he called me and sound very low.
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 that time I asked him about his problem
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 he told me that he was not satisfied with his job because of
low
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the low
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 salary. He did not get any perks and other benefits as well. So he wanted to start his own
business
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 but he was confused about how to take the
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 step. I understood his point of view and
advice
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 him that if you leave your job immediately
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 it means you do not have any source of income. So I suggested
him
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to
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apply
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start a
business
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 online
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. Because I
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 running an online
business
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, I could give him appropriate
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. After two months later, he called me and thanked me for the
advice
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 because through the online
business
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 he earned 2 million won in a month. I felt extremely glad to see that my
advice
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 works in a positive way for him.
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