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Some People Think That Internet Has Brought People Closer Together To what extent do you agree / disagree?

#people #internet
Nowadays, the
internet
 has become prevalent in
people
’s everyday lives. Most
people
 are using smartphones and PCs to connect and use the
internet
 for different deeds, from reading the news to sharing memorable moments with friends and families. It is true that some
people
 count the
internet
 as a facility that brings
people
 closer.
Nevertheless
, I strongly disagree with
this
 idea because I believe that by the advent of the
internet
, the connection between
people
 altered in a way that brought
people
 closer virtually, but farther physically. On the one hand,
people
 are almost always online and join networks
such
 as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter and plenty of other social media which lead to being aware of their acquaintances lively. They share photos, videos and thoughts nearly every hour.
This
 pretends
people
 to be closer than before comparing the times when they met their friends weekly or at least daily.
For instance
, you see the photos of your friend who is living abroad at the moment, while without
internet
, it could happen monthly at the best.
However
, In the past, when
people
 got together, they talked to each other, told memories and spent their time together, but nowadays, when
people
 gather physically, they socialize less and check their smartphones more than before the digital revolution. So, from
this
 aspect, the
internet
 has taken
people
 apart.
For example
, I remember the times when I was a child, we used to meet our family every week and played group games with other children, whereas at the same parties, nowadays children just play with their phones and tablets
instead
 of having fun with their counterparts. All in all,
although
 the
internet
 causes shortening of the distances between
people
, especially for those who live long distances, it makes
people
 somewhat isolated and less social in actual communications. I recommend
people
 to make a balance between virtual and real connections to keep a normal life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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