Some People Think That Internet Has Brought People Closer Together To what extent do you agree / disagree?

Nowadays, the
internet
has become prevalent in
people
’s everyday lives. Most
people
are using smartphones and PCs to connect and use the
internet
for different deeds, from reading the news to sharing memorable moments with friends and families. It is true that some
people
count the
internet
as a facility that brings
people
closer.
Nevertheless
, I strongly disagree with
this
idea because I believe that by the advent of the
internet
, the connection between
people
altered in a way that brought
people
closer virtually, but farther physically. On the one hand,
people
are almost always online and join networks
such
as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter and plenty of other social media which lead to being aware of their acquaintances lively. They share photos, videos and thoughts nearly every hour.
This
pretends
people
to be closer than before comparing the times when they met their friends weekly or at least daily.
For instance
, you see the photos of your friend who is living abroad at the moment, while without
internet
, it could happen monthly at the best.
However
, In the past, when
people
got together, they talked to each other, told memories and spent their time together, but nowadays, when
people
gather physically, they socialize less and check their smartphones more than before the digital revolution. So, from
this
aspect, the
internet
has taken
people
apart.
For example
, I remember the times when I was a child, we used to meet our family every week and played group games with other children, whereas at the same parties, nowadays children just play with their phones and tablets
instead
of having fun with their counterparts. All in all,
although
the
internet
causes shortening of the distances between
people
, especially for those who live long distances, it makes
people
somewhat isolated and less social in actual communications. I recommend
people
to make a balance between virtual and real connections to keep a normal life.
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