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As people live longer and longer, the idea of cloning human beings in order to provide spare parts is becoming a reality. The idea horrifies most people, yet it is no longer mere science fiction. To what extent do you agree with such a procedure? Have you any reservations?

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Nowadays, science has reached a tremendous peak, which could not be thought of twenty years ago. With the desire of enhancing a longer
life
 span, scientists are innovating human clones which has both pros and cons.
This
 essay will discuss both of the views. In my perspective, I do not support human cloning.
First
 of all, I would like to narrate some positive sides of cloning that have sparked much debate. Some
people
 assert that If cloning becomes reality, many, who have several organs failure, can be live more. They would have a longer
life
 span.
Furthermore
, science would reach a new era, where human’s
life
 span would be longer than usual.
On the contrary
, many
people
, who are mostly religious argue that they would not take
this
 innovation well. As per their thought, it would be disastrous for us,
therefore
, we are playing with good.
Moreover
, there would be a general scenario that, those who are rich, would get most of the benefit.
In addition
 to
this
, a large number of poor
people
 are likely to lose valuable organs.
As a result
,
this
 would make a haphazard situation. To make the matter worst, human trafficking would increase suffering for poor
people
, especially from undeveloped countries.
Finally
, there would be a possible demolishment of human civilization. It is true to the fact that innovation is needed, but it should not reach beyond the limit. There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether human cloning is more important than their
life
. To recapitulate, there are other related fields, where science can make development rather than human cloning.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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