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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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Traffic
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congestion
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 is a serious problem in many countries of the world. The number of cars is increasing so rapidly;
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, some
people
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 assert that government should impose a severe
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 on
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 proprietors and spent the money to ameliorate public transport.
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, it has both pros and cons. Personally, I am in favour of the latter view. In the following paragraphs, I will give reasons for my statement. To start with, collection of huge
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 from
car
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 holders will impose extra burden for them as well as discourage new owners from buying a new
car
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. Evidently,
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 would create a great impact on the automobile industry. As a matter of fact, their sales will decrease;
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, it would bring down upward economic trend forcefully. Even so, there are more negative impacts on the automobile industry.
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, millions of
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 related to
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 industry will be unemployed.
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, riding a
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 would only be the rich
people
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’s desire. The middle class, as well as lower-middle-class
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, would not be able to buy a
car
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 anymore. Another close examination would reveal that no one can ensure that imposing a high
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 would refrain rich
people
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 from buying a new
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.
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, levying high taxes would not bring any solution to
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congestion
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.
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, some arguments can be made that levying high taxes can lessen
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congestion
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;
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, the money could be used in developing public transport.
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, when there is reduced
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congestion
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, air pollution would reduce to a great extent. To add, fewer cars means less greenhouse gas which will lead to a clean environment. In summary, I would concede that
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 solution may result in a safer environment and better transport systems, it may impact severely on different aspects.
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, the government should look for imposing a balanced
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 as
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 no problem would be faced by all sectors. Having considered both views, the government should consider all these factors

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Emissions
  • Revenue generation
  • Public dissatisfaction
  • Political issues
  • Financial burden
  • Environmental benefits
  • Efficiency and accessibility
  • Taxation
  • Heavily taxing
  • Private car owners
  • Fund improvements
  • Discourage the use
  • Healthier environment
  • Public transport quality
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