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Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Many people feel that the main target of
university
education
 is to ease the path of getting finer jobs for
students
. Others feel that
university
education
 has a broader interest for
individuals
 &
society
. In my opinion, not only
university
education
 helps to get suitable jobs but
also
 it helps
students
 to make a contribution to both
individuals
 &
society
. There are several advantages of
university
education
. One of them is a good job. But it cannot be only the aim of
university
education
.
University
education
 is the higher-level
education
 that makes a student cope with the outside world better. If they get a perfect job according to their demand they can contribute to their family as well as
society
.
In contrast
, there is a view of others that
university
education
 has a broader interest for
individuals
 and
society
. I completely agree with
this
 opinion. Not all
students
 have the tendency to get a better job, rather there may have some other agenda. Many
students
 become a teacher at the faculty, many
students
 take higher degrees, many become researchers and so on to contribute to the
society
. There are various benefits of
university
education
 that cannot be stated in a sentence. It is mandatory that a graduate has some responsivities to his people and to his nation. Our
society
 needs energetic & young
individuals
 who can contribute the
society
. No one can avoid these responsibilities. In conclusion, I believe that
university
education
 has various kinds of responsibilities including getting good jobs. So it cannot be a sole aim of a
university
.
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