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Many people believe that advertising can have negative effects on customers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the world of digitalization and modernization,
advertisements
 have become a crucial industry that affects modern
human
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 in recent years. Many
believes
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 that
advertisements
 can leave harmful impact
ro
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to
 consumers. I completely agree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay will discuss why advertising has negative effects on
people
 despite a few potential advantages. On the one hand, Well-designed advertisement strategies affect the buying decisions of customers on purchasing
the
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harmful products.
In other words
, commercials promote
people
 to consume everything by telling
people
 only the positive sides.
For instance
, unhealthy drink,
such
 as Coca Cola, use the influencer like Black Pink promotes their goods. As a
results
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, the effect of the drink itself can contribute to diabetes.
Therefore
, it is a justified idea that
advertisements
 have negative effects on consumers.
On the other hand
, another form of campaigning is
the
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campaign advertising that serves as an emphasis on the importance of gender equality, or the
enviromental
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environmental
 protection may have beneficial sides
in
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 some extent. These kinds of
advertisement
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advertisements
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 can play a positive role and raise awareness about social and environmental issues.
For example
, a television commercial depicting the danger of
hazerdous
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hazardous
 wildfire that damage wildlife animals houses in Australia can
went
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 viral, and trillions of
people
 watched it within only a few days.
Thus
,
this
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 ads might influence positively consumers. In conclusion, as
advertisements
 are a part of our life,
this
 essay completely agrees with the view that publicity can affect
people
 in
negative
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a negative
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 way because of the cause of the disease from unhealthy products.
Conversely
, some ads might be beneficial for audiences.
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