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In recent years, ''responsible tourists'' have paid attention to preserving both culture and environment of the places they visit. However, some people say that it is impossible to be a ''responsible tourist''. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Before COVID-19, going abroad to vacation in other countries is the most thing that
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, the travel industry is important to Taiwan, so how to save our tourist site is a big issue that we need to imagine, reported by the newspapers we know lots of visitors usually destroyed the tree or the grace even the building. If we want to solve these
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, the government can go up the money that decreases someone wants to do worse
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. In conclusion, tourism is important to
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 for everyone even government and countries, the person who lives in the world need to protect our environment.
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