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In recent years, ''responsible tourists'' have paid attention to preserving both culture and environment of the places they visit. However, some people say that it is impossible to be a ''responsible tourist''. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Before COVID-19, going abroad to vacation in other countries is the most thing that
people
 need to do. By
this
 ,situation tourists are full everywhere, and they
also
 make some problems to visit the site.
Hence
, lots of
people
 advise these tourists to protect the environment and the places they visit, but some others say
that is
 impossible. In my opinion, if you want
that is
 not very hard to finish.
Although
 when
people
 visit
this
 site, it is already had some destroyed to the places, we can by protect everything around the places to reduce the hurt that we make.
For example
, some tourists always through unless
things
 on the road; face
this
 situation, we can remind ourself and friends accompany with us.
Second
, the travel industry is important to Taiwan, so how to save our tourist site is a big issue that we need to imagine, reported by the newspapers we know lots of visitors usually destroyed the tree or the grace even the building. If we want to solve these
things
Remove the redundancy
apply
show examples
things
, government maybe can ride some list,
for instance
, the government can go up the money that decreases someone wants to do worse
things
. In conclusion, tourism is important to
people
 or countries, and I agree that to be a responsible tourist is hard to do.
Furthermore
,
this
 responsibility is not only for you or me, but it is
also
 for everyone even government and countries, the person who lives in the world need to protect our environment.
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