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Many people are copying famous celebrities from magazines and on TV. Why this is happening? Do you think it’s a good idea to copy celebrities?

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It has been observed that the majority of
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 are trying to imitate famous
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 from the screen and publications. In
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 happens because of the attraction of the fans to the extraordinary lifestyle and, it leads to the loss of an individual’s identity. To start with, there are numerous reasons for
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 to copy celebrities.
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, it is more likely that the fans get inspiration from the breathtaking performances of stars in films and on the stage.
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, nowadays
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 learn amazing vocals and choreographies of the artists which they
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 appreciate and, shoot various covers based on them.
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, the fans are fascinated by the standard of living of their idols and
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, try to purchase clothes and other items.
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, Jennie’s look from Chanel was sold out in seconds.
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, the common tendency of replicating popular
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 can have a detrimental effect on society.
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 is confirmed by the fact that a person duplicating celebrities will not be self-satisfied and acknowledged
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 since he does not have an original character among
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, an individual who is used to copy
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others will not have his own lifestyle and
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, will lose his identification. What is more, following the path of famous
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 can destroy a person’s whole life as not everyone becomes successful in the sphere of media and,
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, a person will struggle a lot in the future. All things considered, despite the fact that celebrities get appreciation from many
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,
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 of trying to imitate them, it would be useful to formulate your own outlook on life and focus on your goals.

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