Getting promotions is one of the biggest motivators for hard work in the modern workplace. Why are people so driven to receive promotions? What other factors motivate people to work hard?

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Getting promotions is one of the biggest motivators for hard
work
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in the modern workplace. Why are
people
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so driven to receive promotions? What other factors motivate
people
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to
work
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hard? Nowadays most
people
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work
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harder to get
promotion
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a promotion
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and it is the best way to motivate
people
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.
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other factors, which motivate
workers
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to be productive.
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of all, a major reason for being obsessed
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career growth is life satisfaction. Each one wants to have better conditions for living and money would help to rich that. A mass media, news and advertisement
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a perfect
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’s surrounding, meanwhile makes
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feel
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from their life and seek to follow them. Of course, it
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amount
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the amount
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of money,
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,fortunately
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high salary can be enough to allow that. No one could just change
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the workplace
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, because they are afraid of being unemployed,
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workers
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employee could choose
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another type
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of profession, cause of lack of education on other spheres. It remains the
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way, which isn’t so risky, like a promotion.
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for most
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the people
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people
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,people
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an elevation means that employers appreciate them and they feel
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more valuable in society.
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, there are other methods equally helpful to keep
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motivation
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for intensive
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, to add events or often give recommendations. Similar
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work days
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workdays
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for
long
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a long
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period is busy for everyone.
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of similar works make
people
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feel a lack of value of
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the job
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, so they lose motivation early. New events for 10
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for
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every day or week could fill a workplace
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with
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colors
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and help to be active. Sometimes
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fall on doing jobs cause of mistakes or
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misunderstandings
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. If employees or old
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will give some recommendations, it would increase productivity. In
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promotion motivate by rising social voluble and status and it is
best
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the best
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non risky
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way for earning more money. New events and
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the help
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of experienced
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workers
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could
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provide motivation.
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