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Getting promotions is one of the biggest motivators for hard work in the modern workplace. Why are people so driven to receive promotions? What other factors motivate people to work hard?

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Getting promotions is one of the biggest motivators for hard
work
 in the modern workplace. Why are
people
 so driven to receive promotions? What other factors motivate
people
 to
work
 hard? Nowadays most
people
work
 harder to get
promotion
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a promotion
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 and it is the best way to motivate
people
.
This
 essay will discuss why it is so and
suggest
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suggestions
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about
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apply
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other factors, which motivate
workers
 to be productive.
First
 of all, a major reason for being obsessed
by
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with
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 career growth is life satisfaction. Each one wants to have better conditions for living and money would help to rich that. A mass media, news and advertisement
shows
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 a perfect
people
’s surrounding, meanwhile makes
people
 feel
dissatisfaction
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a dissatisfaction
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 from their life and seek to follow them. Of course, it
need
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amount
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the amount
an amount
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 of money,
fortunately
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,fortunately
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 high salary can be enough to allow that. No one could just change
workplace
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the workplace
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, because they are afraid of being unemployed,
also
workers
 employee could choose
other type
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another type
other types
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 of profession, cause of lack of education on other spheres. It remains the
last
 way, which isn’t so risky, like a promotion.
In addition
 for most
of
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the people
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people
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,people
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 an elevation means that employers appreciate them and they feel
themselves
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more valuable in society.
However
, there are other methods equally helpful to keep
workers
’
motivation
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motivated
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 for intensive
work
.
For instance
, to add events or often give recommendations. Similar
work days
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workdays
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 for
long
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a long
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 period is busy for everyone.
Amount
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The amount
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 of similar works make
people
 feel a lack of value of
job
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the job
a job
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, so they lose motivation early. New events for 10
minute
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minutes
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for
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every day or week could fill a workplace
by
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with
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colors
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colours
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 and help to be active. Sometimes
workers
 fall on doing jobs cause of mistakes or
misunderstanding
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misunderstandings
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. If employees or old
workers
 will give some recommendations, it would increase productivity. In
conclusion
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 promotion motivate by rising social voluble and status and it is
best
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the best
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non risky
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non-risky
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 way for earning more money. New events and
help
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the help
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 of experienced
worker
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workers
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 could
also
 provide motivation.
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