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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves some people think it is tgood while other think they are disadvantage to this discuss both side and give your opinion

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Sports
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avery
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a very
 crucial role in our
life
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 and few individuals believe that some companies sponsoring
sports
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 as a way of advertising is
advantage
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an advantage
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 other argue that it has drawback the following essay
take
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 a look at
the
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both side of
argument
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the argument
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 many support the view that nowadays
myraid
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myriad
 companies sponsor sport in order to advertise themselves it has its advantage as well as it disadvantage sport is sportsman are given of best good of the
company
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 free of charge
also
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 by the help of
these equipment
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 can
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 high prestige which affect positively for the
company
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 to more ever as many individuals claim that throughout social media which provide the
company
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best
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 good to sportsman than with social media sport which it
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 can help the side to raise
one
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 the other hand the other people argue about harmful of the sponsoring
sports
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 the demerits of advertising through
sports
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 is that
company
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 can be
to
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 closely linked with
team
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a team
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 or the player which can cause bad effect on the
company
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 the sale of
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company
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the company
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 could be affected by the performance of the sportsman
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 it can make the sale drop to conclude up discuss
the
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both
side
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 of
argument
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 I believe that the idea of advertising through sponsoring
sports
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 is
the
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beneficial for
the
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both multinational
company
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 and
sports
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 athlete
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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